COMMENDABLE EFFORT
I've seen it through you,
I've felt it through- too.
The mist looming behind,
Beauty- none of its kind.
And the urge is strong,
To end this walk- so long.
& to step into the zion,
To absorb the soothing violin.
To enter into the gulf,
To get & to be engulfed.
To give in to your grace,
To, and to be embraced.
And the urge is strong,
And it has been so long.
But a yard still remains,
And its driving me insane.
I've always restrained,
Feared, I might stain.
I've always stood austere,
Yet yearning to get near.
But the urge is strong,
And I've restrained so long.
To pull you close & gird,
& that is- a Commendable Effort.
6 comments:
why dont u be more clear for those of us phlegmatic type , for whom its tough to understand emotions... i think you should attach a para with each of your poem for readers like me... to explain it :p
i knew somethin like is gonna surface very soon......
dude sometimes i think tht ur tryin toooo hard yaar!!!
the poem was ofcourse damn good....but i feel sometimes tht u r losin d touch.......earlier ones were better!!!!
neways i m still waitin for somethin related to gods debris or messages from masters!
nitin
thnks for the critical views nitin..... bt man... i still don t understand god s debris nd messages from the masters...
plus me on a break from thinking... ;-P
this was a lil earlier compilation.
all i can say about ur poems
hamne aapki poems yahan se tapa lee hain magazine ke liye
probably u'l get more sincere comments then
This is written so well...
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